WALT..Write descriptively using a range of language features. Throughout the year we've been trying to add descriptive words in our stories. This week we had to add the figurative language as well (Simile, Metaphor etc.) What I found hard was applying all my planning on my story and thinking about the deep descriptive words to apply on my story. The exciting thing was the cliff hanger on the end of my story. next time I will add more figurative language and think more descriptive words without guidance.
During a bright and warm day, there were miniature objects flying around the endless blue sky. A young boy gripping a fragile paper plane like he could end his life if he moved a single finger. Groaning echoes under him made him more anxious. They were his precious friends and he was the last survivor.
The wind was a warm wave, entering and filling his lungs with the aroma of summer. His heart skipped a beat, he was extremely nervous. Nothing could be heard but the wind gushing, wings flapping and the giant animals roaring for the young boy to lose his grip and be devoured.
He was beginning to change his angle as the wind started to vanish. He was preparing to land. Lost in the woods while holding his torn paper plane, He felt a warm drip of water go through his face. Reminiscing the memories that played in his mind. Revealing the truth was like being a traitor to his friends. What did he do so blameworthy?
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